Read this and let me know what you guys think. I'm revising a story I've been writing for a while of Kadumo's childhood. I could use a bit of critique toom

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Its a rather sad story but one some can relate to. I think it is going along quiet smoothly so far. I must say I was really surprised at the lack of grammer and punctuation errors.
You are definitely headed in the right direction, but I would live to see a little more description as to what they are. I noticed it said paw steps and I wondered what creature they were. Fox, dog, wolf, big cats, raccoons, etc.